Explanation writing. Spend, Share and Save.

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Money, Money, Money, Money. Do you want to know how to spend, Share and Save money. That is what I am about to tell you. So lets get right to it. Let’s begin with spending money.  

Here are some things children my age could possibly spend money on: Clothes. Food.lollies.Shoes.PS games.the movies. a Haircut.What would you save your money on? 

Here are some examples of what kids my age or older might save their money on. Headphones.An IpadAn Iphone,Glasses (If your short or long  sighted) New BedA carOr Going overseas.The first reason why you might share your money is, Some people give to charitable causes. Some celebrities like Oprah Winfrey, Sandra Bullock, Alicia Keys, Matthew Mcconaughey, John Cena, Ben Affleck and 50 Cent give money to charities..  These Celebrities support Charities. Some even make there own. Giving money away to people is good and bad. 

The good way is to give it to people you trust that will pay you back. The bad way is when you give it to people you do not trust and can’t pay you back. In spending, saving and sharing money it is important to set spending goals to guide yourself.  A goal helps you to save money on things you need instead of spending it willy nilly. 

When considering how you will spend, save and share your money it is important to decide whether or not to spend your money, Save your money or share it out.